Crushed Seduction (Alliterisen)

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Two threats, open love letter
Wet my whistle the story’s steamy
Clear cut quaint question asked
“Who will be my last love?” you ask.
I answer in art
As is my way with meaning
It is I you yearn to love

Don’t dream about me at night
In wondrous fits of flight
Don’t you undress me in dreams
Ripping apart satin seams
Looking to loose my buttons
I know how this story ends
I will not be led into such a nightmare

Shall I be spurned, belittled
Written off without one touch of skin
How the hell did love die
Before care could even begin 
I cry ice cold tears
My heart hurts, no medicine
Can save my crushed seduction

This was a prompt from dVerse. See it below:


For today’s MTB prompt our poetry follows the style of The Alliterisen, created by Udit Bhatia. It is a 7-line poem (septet) containing a set number of alliterations per line and adhering to a specific syllable structure.

Alliterisen poems can be either complex or rhyming. Choose either one.

  1. Poetry formulae for Complex Alliterisen:-

a 7 line poem
2 alliterations on every line
choose a syllabic count of 7 or more thus:
1st line- x syllables [e.g. 7]
2nd line- x+2 syllables [e.g. 9]
3rd line- x-1 syllables [e.g. 6]
4th line- (x+2)-1 syllables [e.g. 8]
5th line- x-2 syllables [e.g. 5]
6th line- (x+2)-2 syllables [e.g. 7]
7th line- x syllables [e.g. 7]

  1. Poetry formulae for Rhyming Alliterisen;

a 7 line poem
1 alliteration in every line
7 syllables per line
rhyme scheme as follows: aabbccd

I chose both the 1st and 3rd follow the Complex Alliterisen while the 2nd stanza is a Rhyming Alliterisen. I hope you enjoy!

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C. Stuart Lewis creates poems with feeling, intelligence and sex appeal. His short stories and books focus on characters that feel real in real world situations. Originally from the United States he now resides in Ontario, Canada. Check out his webpage at TheAuthorStew.ca

16 thoughts on “Crushed Seduction (Alliterisen)”

  3. Amazing! This has such a lovely flow (I can imagine it being put to music). Not only did you try both the forms but wrote three alliterative stanzas of a tragic love story!! You, sir, deserve this 🏆

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    1. Thank you! I don’t know about putting it to music. I’d be interested to see that. “It’s got a good beat but I don’t know if I can dance to it.” lol

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  5. You went to town on this poem, Stew, tackling both forms of Allierisen! My favourite stanza is the middle one, with the rhymes and deft alliteration, and the passion in these lines:

    ‘Don’t you undress me in dreams
    Ripping apart satin seams
    Looking to loose my buttons’.

    Methinks the lady doth protest too much.

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    1. “-O, but she’ll keep her word.
      -Have you heard the argument? Is there no
       offense in ’t?
      -No, no, they do but jest, poison in jest. No
       offense i’ th’ world.”
      -from Hamlet

      It does fit very well. 😁 Thank you so much Kim for your kind words. I knew I wanted to try both kinds of Allierisen I’m just glad they all came together so well.

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